Twenty One
Disclaimer: This poem doesn’t make sense, but I need comments. 
this is the year of twenteen one candles
who told you to leave?
not I, my friend
when three sully years
I measured your smile
from my heart’s bank
or wore it, at days, for you
but you stole at it
like a dank sock
wore at it
year after year after year
we scamper back
to one white wall
to those eighteen shadows,
with whom
you asked me to dance
alone
maybe because you asked
questions
that I could not answer
and I began to pelt
at your tear
my once faithful reflection
so dizzy I can see myself
rippling back
fluttery
not half so weak
but half more still
than a devil’s silence
behind those fourteen lights
where you once watched me burn
when I stood hostess to your moonstruck dream
in a riffraff game of head and heart
and this is the year of twenteen and one
one shadow more
my life’s a night
perennial
Prisoner that I am again
in a Heaven
that smells of Hell
soo soo beautiful hera
you really dint need tha disclaimer up there, it takes away from the poem. I have always loved your poetry, probably because it has this touch of darkness, shadows, nights etc. This is good, a lot of lines in there, images, esp the end, the heaven and hell bit. I would suggest you remove that ‘year after year after year,’ it’s too overused a phrase in poetry. Maybe also change the title to Twenteen One, I really like that version of 21:) Otherwise, I think it’s fine the way it is.
and how come you just truned 21? Why are you not a year older than me? This is so unfair
I suppose the poetry and the meanings behind it make the most sense to the writer, but it seems like you’re yearning for an age and time you have no lost.
I may be wrong, but that’s what i interpreted from it
she is back
i like it…sounds upbeat
NICE!!!!!!!!!
thanks eveyone, and umm..who is Name?
lol, I have no idea either. Interesting name though…Name.
whats in it? i am here just for the reading bit…
you could introduce yourself : )
what do you wanna know?