The Still Skin of an Aging Water
The River twisted and looped,
A hula dancer in full motion.
Away in the distance, where
The Glittering Pixies bopping
In the water, consummate
Wit the eager hungry sun rays,
There stands a broken bridge.
It weeps and overflows the river below,
Nostalgic for times of past glory.
I sit, the river’s breath
Condensing in my eyes.
And wonder how many lovers had
Wept rivulets by the riverside,
How many the river comforted,
With its ageless wisdom and placidity.
I wonder how many fish had been born
And reborn in the river bed,
The patient river always allowing,
Itself and its offspring to be devoured.
I wonder at the pride the river must feel
For its impeccable immortality
And the lessons
It teaches and has taught.
I stumble over the rocks and enter the river
The river tearing out the anguish,
Washing the memories,
and carrying me away
Oh, so far away, just as it had carried millions
Before me
and millions after me.
The torrent consoles, leaving in me,
Its warming numbness
Its delightful cold.
I smile, and I get out of the water, bold,
Proud, an ageless river’s youthful disciple.
Hey, I just read your poem more closely and I like it more
lol. For one thing I completely love the title, it gives a very lofty feel to the whole thing. I also like the metaphor of bopping pizzies, it’s very energetic. The patience and cycle of rebirth of the river is also powerful. however in these line :
“And reborn in the river bed,
The patient river always allowing,
Itself and its offspring to be devoured.
I wonder at the pride the river must feel”
‘river’ become redundant. Fix that somehow, it’ll help the flow of the poem. Good work waisay
Your poem has a very prosy feel to it 
OH my GOD! This is one of the best poems I’ve read in a while. Beautiful imagery. Beautiful symbolism. Well constructed metaphors that are descriptive and represent more things than one. Brilliant work!
An ageless river’s youthful disciple…LOL…
why, I wonder, who could the river and the disciple be if I were to metaphorise it…U know, don’t u Sana?
Good werk! There are a few glitches but I’ll leave them for you to find fer yourself…
Sidra:Thanks…I’ll look into the redundancy and see how can i change it for the better…And i KNEW you’ll say it has a prosy feel to it! ahaha…u hate prosy poems, dont u? haahah…
Noor-ul-lain: I LOVE you for ur enthusiasm! Lol…thank you so much for your heart-warming comments! Lol..
Usman: VERRYYY funny! lol…thankkk you for your comments too! lol…
Well written though I disagree the way the paragraphs are structured. They seem to break the flow and make this poem a difficult read.