Comments on: The Art of StoryTelling – Part 1 http://www.readitlive.com/2007/02/26/the-art-of-storytelling-part-1/ dedicated to promoting budding poets, writers and bloggers Thu, 02 Feb 2012 20:10:04 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.0.4 By: Usman Tanveer http://www.readitlive.com/2007/02/26/the-art-of-storytelling-part-1/comment-page-1/#comment-376 Usman Tanveer Fri, 11 May 2007 08:32:05 +0000 http://www.readitlive.com/2007/02/26/the-art-of-storytelling-part-1/#comment-376 This is good stuff...will read more...but u shudnt change POV in a short story, or at least a subsection...if its Saba whose POV ure describing, stick with it... "He hated reading his work out loud." Thats what i mean when i say dont change POV... 8/10 This is good stuff…will read more…but u shudnt change POV in a short story, or at least a subsection…if its Saba whose POV ure describing, stick with it…

“He hated reading his work out loud.”
Thats what i mean when i say dont change POV…

8/10

]]> By: Uzer http://www.readitlive.com/2007/02/26/the-art-of-storytelling-part-1/comment-page-1/#comment-47 Uzer Wed, 28 Feb 2007 16:00:56 +0000 http://www.readitlive.com/2007/02/26/the-art-of-storytelling-part-1/#comment-47 Haha the horse is dead, buried and decomposed. For the love of all that is nice and decent please stop beating it... Haha the horse is dead, buried and decomposed. For the love of all that is nice and decent please stop beating it…

]]> By: Sana Tanveer http://www.readitlive.com/2007/02/26/the-art-of-storytelling-part-1/comment-page-1/#comment-46 Sana Tanveer Wed, 28 Feb 2007 15:42:24 +0000 http://www.readitlive.com/2007/02/26/the-art-of-storytelling-part-1/#comment-46 the very short story most certainly qualifies as a short story! :D lol...only that i originally wrote it for this story so here it is! :D the very short story most certainly qualifies as a short story! :D lol…only that i originally wrote it for this story so here it is! :D

]]> By: Sidra Nadeem http://www.readitlive.com/2007/02/26/the-art-of-storytelling-part-1/comment-page-1/#comment-44 Sidra Nadeem Tue, 27 Feb 2007 19:03:04 +0000 http://www.readitlive.com/2007/02/26/the-art-of-storytelling-part-1/#comment-44 This piece here is quite different, read better, than the original one I read. It's shorter and more interesting. I particularly like your elaborate description of the henna patterns and Amna's to-be husband's looks. Also very nice use of my idea of that very short story not qualifying as a complete story :P And do you realize that the paragraph 'Amna took a deep...pimply nose' is one long sentence as one paragraph?!? you could easily have broken it into atleast 3 sentences. Looking forward to the next chapter. Good place to end the first one :) This piece here is quite different, read better, than the original one I read. It’s shorter and more interesting. I particularly like your elaborate description of the henna patterns and Amna’s to-be husband’s looks. Also very nice use of my idea of that very short story not qualifying as a complete story :P
And do you realize that the paragraph ‘Amna took a deep…pimply nose’ is one long sentence as one paragraph?!? you could easily have broken it into atleast 3 sentences.

Looking forward to the next chapter. Good place to end the first one :)

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